I have recently graduated with a degree in IT and am tailoring my CV.
I have written the introduction/objective part but I don't know what I have written is not professional enough or if its too over the top.
I've seen so many CV's/Resumes that have the same old
I am a team player that thrives in a challenging environment
kind of opening statement
I want them to see my passion, so I like to be more out there but I don't want to scare them away.
Here is my introduction to my CV:
My passion is software development, I love it so much that its what I want to make my career out of. I love learning every chance I get and putting my newly found skills into practice by developing apps during my own time.
I would love the opportunity to work for a company whose team is dedicated to writing beautiful software and that goes above and beyond that of which is expected all out of pure passion for software development.
EDIT After reading through the comments I have rewritten it accordin to suggestions by focusing more on my skills and experience:
I am a recent graduate with a strong background in both Information Technology and Adaptability. Not only have I achieved Bachelor of IT and gained additional experience through online courses and self-driven projects, but I also specialize in full stack software development (.NET and open source). I take pride in leading new initiatives, collaborating efficiently with my team, and look forward to contributing towards a respected history of software development at a dedicated and grounded company.
What I would like to know:
- Is this professional?
- Should I tone it down a little with the enthusiasm?